Fractured Hearts

From just the “intro”

Problem = the game can and SHOULD be a freaking HAREM. Full stop. I don’t care what other “multiple endings” there are in your mind Dev: if you can/will be able to pursue multiple females = DO NOT make me choose between them. I want them ALL!

> Do not imply “grandchildren” if you’re never going to pull that trigger – that’s you being a dick to your audience. Especially the ones that like the pregnancy/impregnation as a kink.

> Cancer is you being a DICK to anyone (including me) who has had it. We lived through it asshat; we know what it’s like, [Not a single bit of the process was fun – I do NOT ever recommend it, and thank you for the reminder I may be sterile now for all I fucking know! >.<] and so has anyone who’s had family who’s had it… IF you can provide “trigger” warning bullshit for Sexual assault (which also is NEVER necessary in any setting, and serves nothing to the characters but drama) you can absolutely fuck right off with the entire concept of Cancer. Kill her with an anuerism; a heart attack. A fucking car accident. What you can straight up stab the main character [We WILL get to that…] but for some reason she gets to die as slow and painfully and with as little dignity as possible? JUST so you can provide more reasons the MC had a DEATH WISH?!? (This IS me being gentle, by the way… you don’t want me to not be. Because I assure you; push much farther with this bullshit from the start and I’m GOING to take the gloves off in my next comment – you are SUPPOSED TO WANT THE AUDIENCE TO WANT TO KEEP PLAYING! Not. A hard. Concept)

>> He’s NOT going to build ANY relationship if he’s mentally/emotionally falling apart, PTSD; JOBLESS AND AN ALCOHOLIC. His “first” girl (who may just be a friend and frankly was ESTRANGED for no bloody reason) was said to be cornered in an alley – somehow, after fuck knows how many years they were apart and it DOES NOT MATTER IF SHE WAS HIS FIRST KISS = SHE WASN’T HIS FIRST TIME AND FOR ALL WE KNOW HE ISN’T HERS… BECAUSE YOU’RE FUCKING RETARDED. FOR, REASONS… Jesus. Again: You STAB his ass in an alley and then make him reflect on life choices that for all we know matter for FIVE FUCKING SECONDS. Not. The place. To START your fucking story. Whatever it’s going to be.

>> A) SHE WOULD BE A RAPE VICTIM (Rape is NOT sexual assault; I don’t give a flying rat’s ass if they changed the definition to an umbrella term just to make morons who have likely never been through it, or anything close to it, “comfortable” – there was a REASON for the gradient system which was how the police knew by what metric to PUNISH OFFENDERS! Not to mention whom actually IS one to start with) by the time he gets his ass in gear to save her – and he would be hearing it. B) He’s dead in about maybe 30 minutes absolute max, just from blood loss even from a gut wound, and it’s worse if you render him as a SOLDIER that’s “special trained” taking the knife out. Because it causes more damage coming out, than it does going in. C) Wherever you go after that point = she is a VICTIM: you are going to be required to treat her with kid gloves. For no other reason than you want to blue ball the fuck out of sex content… So why go there? It adds NOTHING to your story. At all.

These are all the reasons that just from the title – and the fact you don’t outright make it a HAREM tagged game, with pregnancy, I would call the game worth much less. Not worth my time investment. So you have until the end of the demo to FIX this bullshit. Or I will simply know that all you want to do is fuck up your characters lives all to hell, and fuck with the heads of your audience. Which if that is the case, best of luck to you gettting supporters. You’re gonna need it.