Welcome To Hell The Vampire Chronicles

Constructive criticism: Put an aside at the beginning of the game that asks if the player wants it to be a Harem game. Which would let you focus on ONLY the harem part of the game. You could also just in brackets mark what all the choices will actually get, but I know and am frustrated by the fact most games do not actually do that. It would save time in need for mods, or walkthroughs. Just a thought.

• You can make the girls friends = this does not mean they need to be sexual with each other. IF it’s a HAREM they should be focused ONLY on the MC.
• The Married/Involved women CAN be the lesbians, BUT they should not be IN the harem. Period. That’s another level of convoluted you don’t need.
• The story makes no real sense. You don’t seem to have an end goal; never mind a set way to get there. The walkthrough included does NOT tell me what joining each faction WILL get me. If one is tied to the HAREM path, mark it. It’s also in spanish, which means two of the answers I don’t even know what they are (It says so in game, not in the actual walkthrough for the game – that is a problem because of the above.
• Muyuki = The answer “I have feelings for you” SHOULD be the one that nets a HAREM response. It’s confusing to the player that the emotionally distant answer is the one that is harem marked in the walkthrough.

However; where you really lose me in general is one point.

• These are VAMPIRES. Annabelle earlier has a scene while MC is a child, where she is a doctor. They meet and she is his first kiss. At the VERY LEAST, she SHOULD be aware that MC is trying to PROTECT the three of them. Especially if there are ANY harem points. Hell, all of the girls should be aware of it. Lily for trust in her best friend/boyfriend – He’s not an Ex. He died. They never formally dissolved their relationship. Muyuki should be aware by some super secret assassin sense of his noble heart/knight stance or cultural difference in view points – I’m not the one that made her Japanese, but they do understand pushing someone away to protect them, no matter if it hurts you. Heck that scene with Rebecca should have in part – instead of having her focus on the girls and their wounds/starting a fight that didn’t need to happen – reminded them of the fact MC IS the type to be cruel if he has to, in order to protect them. Which could lead to them more easily coming to a reconciliation in later chapters. [It SHOULD NOT always be the man apologizing to the woman, since as Lily said; words can hurt/none of them actually want to be rejected by MC. Which at this point as the player, I am willing to do as you’ve left it. None of the female characters (who you’ve also spent half the scenes halfway implying lesbianism relationships building – which again, confuses the issue of a harem) have significant enough emotional investments by MC to justify any of that church exit scene. IF the women REALLY cared about him at all, they DON’T get to be that mean. Not without consequence]
• Do NOT reset the harem points at any point. EVER. I chose those answers, and I earned them by said choices. It is the ending I want. Setting them to zero at the beginning of ANY chapter also borks the programming as far as accounting for them logically. It can make your coding all the harder, and it doesn’t have to.
• Resetting those points means I DO NOT know that I am on the Harem path: which makes Annabelle/Lily and Muyuki’s exit from the chapel VERY JARRING. Lily’s own words SHOULD be used against her. And Anna – and because of her behavior and the weird response she gives if you DO say you have feelings for her, Muyuki SHOULD get called out on ONLY wanting sex, or specifically NOT being honest that she WANTS to be part of the HAREM.
• While I’m on it: Show me the points I currently have. Specifically for Harem at least. Listing all of the girls might be nice as well, but that might clog the screen. Hell you could do like Zelda and make it a bar of hearts on the screen for everyone who IS in the harem. Color code it to all of the girls that will be. If you’re not going to tell people directly what the answers will do, considering the amount of choices the game has, visual indicators do help.
• A harem game is not the same as a dating sim. Do not treat them like they are. A harem is about building rapport with your women. Period. A dating sim is about choosing the one you like best, and running with it.
• Do not penalize your player for wanting points with any of the girls IF it is a harem game. Samantha should not take the three who were at 10 down to 7. EVER.
• Why are there so many choices listed in the walkthrough as “does not matter?” Every choice should get you something. Either more vampire power, more personality trait, more likelihood that there will be a harem end, etc. There do not need to be minus point choices. I’m not trying to solve algebra here. I’m trying to enjoy hot girls, with hopefully a decent story. One of those so far, you have. The other’s not quite there yet… Call it minestrone. It’s not bad, but it’s missing some meat.

You REALLY need to fix where you left things. I don’t care that they can live for hundreds of years. People are not Yo Yo’s, and you should not treat your audience like that. It will not help you earn paetrons. Which directly relates to funding the game. Do I like vampires; yes. I wish there were more games, more cohesively written. This one is not unsalvagable. But damn, do you have A LOT of work to do to make it so I will waste gigs downloading the next version. In a harem game: ALL of the girls who CAN be romanced (and not all of them can, I am aware) BELONG TO/WITH the MC. That isn’t a debatable point. They should understand/feel that he as much belongs to them. So stop mucking around with will they/won’t they. It’ll cost you more than it’ll draw into the story.

I’m also not fond of “demon MC” looking more like Emo Heath Ledger in Dark Knight Rising. But that’s more personal preference. (Do note: I used caps only to emphasize the important parts of my point. Some take this as immaturity, it’s not. Tone doesn’t carry through online, and this is not a perfect fix for that problem, but it’s the best I’ve got)