The Home of Pleasure

Decided to give you one more chance.

Apparently I shouldn’t have:

= Not only have you introduced a character into the “Harem” game that DOES NOT WANT A RELATIONSHIP AT ALL, You have continued on with and actively MADE WORSE the fucking extortion plot arc that frankly didn’t need to be there to start with, and borks the whole freaking game. On many, many levels.

= You asked his MOM for help. You DID NOT make MC confess to her why he ACTUALLY needed the money (like a pussy) so she says No. Because you want this asshole to get in DEEPER than he needs to. For only fuck knows what reason. Other than you couldn’t be arsed to just have the people that are going to be TIED to the incest plot points, accept that they’re okay with incest in the longrun; without overcomplicating the whole damned thing. [Again – needless blue balling]

= This actually makes MC a CRIMINAL! If you intended to make another Mob based run at a harem game; go for it. It’ll probably turn out just as finished as all the others.

= Going to Kate because he THINKS her father is in a mob (and frankly IF he legitimately is you can fuck absolutely right off with Kate as a character included in the game at all) was never going to be a solution to start with > but it COULD have been.

= Instead you made him go off half cocked (and did not state DEFINITIVELY in the game that it was the WRONG choice) talking about information he DID NOT FACTUALLY HAVE; just to get screwed into a corner to become their DRIVER anyway. When this entire bullshit PLOT ARC did not need to have ever happened and shouldn’t be in the fucking game!

= You BARELY; and somewhat confusingly, opened BEST FRIENDO as a potential love interest, had Grace ham-hand fixing things with Beth (MC was not wrong to call them out on that bullshit and you using them to yell at him for telling them to grow the fuck up was stupid) Best Friend is still MARRIED… So that’s GOING to be an unnecessarily convoluted test of her LOYALTY (as a harem member; LOYALTY is sacrosanct as that trait is what makes the Harem WORK. Loyalty to THEIR man, and of the man to HIS women. If she cheats once > she CAN cheat again… That’s all I will say about it. You WILL need to be very, CERTAINLY clear the whole way through with this character, exactly where her true loyalty lies. Which is why she didn’t need to be married)

= Kate is still fucking MC (in real life; would not happen – there’s a reason she had so many failed relationships, and at this point > make her kneecap her father with a goddamned crowbar. If you have to, in order to have him understand the point he DOES NOT get to interfere further in HER love life. Especially if he ever wants grandchildren or a fucking blood legacy! At this point the ONLY way I’d accept her into the harem is if you make her let MC kneecap, or hospitalize that asshole) * I DO NOT forgive you for that bullshit scene with her driver, and you might as well call the MC a COLOSSAL moron for continuing that relationship after that scene. Either he’s a masochist, or he’s got a legitimate DEATH WISH. [IF you’re going to insist on this criminal path; MC DOES NOT get to remain a spineless little BITCH the whole game! Springboard him beating the shit out of both of those dipshits; and the asshole driver, to MAKE him not be a little jellyfish and actually become capable of RULING the fucking criminal organization you seem to want him unreasonably to be tied to]

But we all know you’re not going to do that. It would make any level of SENSE. So this was your last update. You blue balled Bo for no reason when she’s literally one of TWO people MC is actually FUCKING. You have not marked her as pregnant, even though there is an indicator. You have not even marked Kate as pregnant; even though it would be a good way to get Daddy Most Dickheaded to BACK THE FUCK OFF ENTIRELY. You have over complicated several issues in general that don’t need to be. So I gave you a shot; I played through… and I can see the brick wall coming that you’re going to slam into. Hope that works out for you, because if you don’t find a way to LEGITIMATELY resolve this crime issue that didn’t need to happen in the first place you WILL either kill the MC, or lead to NTR for several females he cares about. Which is not Harem as a genre.

At this point considering several of my recent comments haven’t been put through – I’m going to assume perhaps I’ve offended/pissed off or upset the Moderators. Who really need to rethink having a comment section at all if they’re actively going to cherry pick what gets through. Nothing I have written in any of my comments legally counts as “hate speech.” Most of it would not even be moderately insulting. I do say most. I’m aware I have insulted to some degree. Thus there’s no legitimate reason I can think of that you would block my comments. You’re not going to contact me, and I wouldn’t bother asking. So it is what it is. If this gets through, great. If not, it may genuinely be my last attempt to make any comment at all on this site.

I’ll be clear: I don’t expect anyone to EVER agree with my opinions. At this point, I don’t even expect you to understand them; given so many of you call my commentary negative. To me, it is (however frustratedly given – since most of you take it the wrong way, or straight up don’t care to read most of the freaking comment before replying) CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM.

I comment on what isn’t working, or could be implemented better. Whether that be in plot or mechanics. I will also point out that in many cases I do also offer suggestions for plot, or implementation of mechanics. So many of you just seem to ignore that point, when you criticism my attempts to help as negative. Devs do need that feedback, MORE than they need to know what people enjoy. There are plenty of people that will give them that. Anyone in any creative medium, does need both sorts of feedback. If they don’t know what isn’t working, they can’t fix it. They won’t improve if it’s just a constant yes man situation. I play these games very thoroughly, and I won’t comment on games that I haven’t done so. If you play more casually fine and fair enough. That does NOT invalidate my opinion. Any more than mine does for yours. I do not think I can be more blunt about it. To the Devs, the moderators of any given adult site I’ve commented on, or those who might read the work I put in.

For example:

= You implemented a free roam space that doesn’t include hints as to where to go, or when it will end. You hide “rewards” (which are just extra renders) in it. ALL this does is cock block the game unnecessarily.

= You implemented a stat system with no player input. He goes to the gym and gets +1 Fitness (we will SO get to this…) He goes to work he gets paid. This did not NEED to be in the game. Nor did the stats affection/perversion. They ONLY exist to lock off scenes you know that we’re playing the game to see. There is NO point in telling the players they can choose whomever they want to date in any amount – and then locking any scene with the girl if they make what you call the “wrong” choice. It should be about HOW they want to access scenes, and in what context. Not whether they will be able to even see a given scene.

IE: Perversion could lead to BDSM content (and a more Master/Slave relationship in time) Affection would be more romantic. Each choice that raises said stat should be clearly shown after the choice is made so that players don’t need to waste time constantly checking what the fuck the choice did.

= You at least made optional a minigame section that frankly just straight up adds NOTHING to the game, and doesn’t need to be there. IF it was a way to gain much more affection/perversion – THEN you have a reason it exists. As a failsafe to ensure that players CAN see the scenes they want to see no matter whether they fuck up in choices that are not clear in context. (It would also be more clearly rewarding than just seeing a girl orgasm – which you’re eventually going to have to render anyway…)

= You implemented incest as an option JUST to lock off content and blue ball the player. No Bueno. The story would make LESS sense the way you’ve written it if Sophie was this hesitant in her default setting (it only SORT OF makes sense in the Incest On setting) as it stands she’s lived with her “Brother” long enough to have come to terms with how she feels. Grace would be the same (you have done a piss poor job with balancing equal stats with just those to major characters by the way – and you do need to present EQUAL choice in their regard. Grace can be “protective” of the MC without being a massive bitch about it; and if she’s JEALOUS, you need to make that more obvious. I get it, barely. It’s badly implemented and players like myself ARE going to need more than just visual/over dramatized behavioral clues in context) so there’s really no reason not to just accept that you’ve allowed Incest in the game and go from there. They can discuss it to a fine point and all the checks to continue or not are fine; but writing it the way you have is just screaming to the player “Let me blue ball you.” And there is more than one instance…

= Beth also makes it obvious if you’re not skipping that what she wants to tell you is that she is related. In exactly ONE fucking sentence. That if you are skipping is way too easy to miss. Grace isn’t entirely wrong in her handling of the situation – because you’ve written the game and structured it in such a way that she HAS a point, to start with. Beth can be underconfident… but if she says she’s going to do something = you have to actually make her do it. Or she IS exactly as untrustworthy as Grace fears and all you’re doing is creating a conflict that genuinely does not need to be there. I have half siblings in real life that I have never met, and would want to meet… and I know it would be difficult. But it wouldn’t take me five or more days to come out and say “Yeah, so you know your Dad… he wasn’t just YOUR Dad.” (She is obviously meant to be one of the Major if not Main Characters… this is treating your audience like you think we’re stupid)

= Bo is either added for “Lesbian Content” or as the token Asian Girlfriend. She’s not a bad character; but she does need a better reason to exist than best friend’s support blanket, or the Brick Wall Beth will toss at MC because she thinks “we can’t do this…” (Introducing her cousin to MC, and her wingmaning for that… in order for HER to be the one to introduce the MC to the idea of actually building a harem would work to give her more import to the story)

= Jessica. Was introduced on Day 5 for no reason, as the MUCh more attractive version of a character that legitimately DOES NOT need to be in the game. (Grace’s co worker) as MC’s “Best Friend.” Why? She could be introduced as a nurse when/if MC gets injured badly but NOT critically. It would make more sense and be less obvious. She could still be married – it wouldn’t make the MC seem like an idiot for not mentioning at any point he even had a friend or that she was married… and would be a more smooth introduction. While keeping in the obvious Netori flag. It’s also odd that as far as I’ve played she gets exactly a 1-2 point investment, but not in LUST. If Affection is ALSO going to be a way to win a girl’s heart (or into her pants for the long term) then fine. But again, this is a character that screams to the audience “We want you to want to chase this girl; and yes, we’re absolutely going to blue ball the hell out of you with her content.”

= We’re also at least 6 days in from where I stopped to write this, and we see that Angela is ON the character screen… but she may as well not even be in the story (and at 44 years old What. The. Fuck. Is the point. In her having a pregnant: No Option?!?) * Legitimately you could make her 38 it would still be viable she has late teen kids, and she’d still be within about 3 years where she could SAFELY get pregnant. As a 44 year old woman – she actually has NO options. There is no reason for her to be in the game. Other than some dumb assed porn fantasy. a literal Fantasy, that is porn mind based. She would be absolutely fine to include as the HOME MAKER. The one that does the laundry, the cooking, the cleaning. Walks the dog whatever. She can find stability and joy in taking care of the family – and also hint that she wants grandbabies… she can go out and have friends and keept a stable life. But she truly should just be a background character. That way you don’t have Grace being a passive aggressive twat about playing Cinderella.

= Kate. Does NOT need to be shown as STRONGER than the MC. She is FEMALE. He is MALE. There would be a DISTINCT Strength difference in almost EVERY. FUCKING. CASE. Him pushing to impress her = fine. Believable. Ish (Considering she gets one random scene you even see her before she decides to introduce herself and you choose whether you’re “interested” in her) Them both using the same weights; but HE is the one that STRUGGLES?

That’s where you fuck up – and the ONLY reason you added it was again, to introduce a bullshit minigame that doesn’t need to be there and is in fact OPTIONAL. (If you want to make him push harder because he’s distracted about how to handle all the girls’ problems, how to fix them and help the people he cares about = that is believable. Make it on a treadmill or doing shoulder lifts to make it that much more so. NO ONE is going to be that distracted with BENCH PRESS = That’s just asking to KILL YOURSELF. If you write it so that he injures himself while training when she’s NOT even there – It doesn’t negate her importance; it allows her empowerment as a professional wherein she gets to show off her actual skillset, and it doesnt get into a pissing contest that SCIENTIFICALLY HAS ALREADY BEEN PROVEN FOR EONS! The one actual reason for that whole scene outside of introducing the minigame was bullshit social politics) The way you have written this WILL dent a lot of players’ interest in this character. If you want to write her to be his encouragement to try new areas in the fitness center or to bolster his actual path in fitness; fine. Great, go for it.

She can be a good character. She DOES NOT need to be a blatant example of “The one skill/hobby we have legitimately given you, doesn’t matter if you’re the MAIN CHARACTER of the game – I’m going to just automatically do it better.” (If she was focused on Swimming, fair game. Running. Crunches. All fair. Jump rope for more calsthetics – there ARE things she could genuinely compete with him and be realistically better at. IF he isn’t also focused on those things. Weight lifting, is NOT one of them. Just ask any female weight lifter going against a “trans” person : / ) * That’s not even to mention that no one’s going to take a physical therapist that just gets naked with her client in the first freaking session at all seriously. So again, the minigame introduction actively HARMS the story the way you’ve implemented things thus far.