Fall of the Angels

First – for a HAREM game pal; you have FAR too many “taken” females that shouldn’t be. Or their love interests NEED to die off – and they need to be open to pursuit by MC. That, would be “harem.” The way you have it now is MC getting cock blocked… but we will get to that.

Second; Grim setting is fine. Dark setting is fine = Harem. IS NOT. The place for that. Zuriel, if female had BETTER be alive; not raped > not starving or disfigured. She better be able to be RESCUED. Or there was no point introducing her damned character.

Third – There is NO point introducing a love triangle between MC his brother and ANY given Girl. That’s you trying too hard to give the Antagonist a reason to go dark > and SIGNPOSTING he’s the antagonist; when he’s not. I’m not even sure you’re gonna make the DEMON the antagonist. (There’s got to be a reason for that fucking Question Mark in the Bio page… which, real subtle by the way)

Four – why involve the Mom? No really. Answer me that. If she’s not going to be in the list (and that is an issue we’re coming to, Chuckles don’t worry) then why bother writing her so damned prominently. Just to pad the run time? If she IS going to be available (don’t make the MC go demon path just to add in incest where you think it should be allowed – I can see you doing that, and it would be stupid. They’re already “not human.” You don’t need to excuse it; you need to decide whether you really want to go there)

Five: What the fuck was the point in making MC choose a spirit animal and then just saying Nope. Fuck it – Raven. [I get the call out to Odin in Norse Myth; and it’s actually suitable for what you’re building if you know what he sacrificed to get them… I’d even excuse the sufferance in the spirit realm as Odin willingly hung himself, at length, from Ygdrasil for knowledge…] and seriously ASSHOLE… learn to PACE properly. You cannot cock tease with that many spots in the harem; SHOW that there are several females who are shunted off to the side because you’re focused on EXACTLY TWO OF THEM, or they are TAKEN… and then go at break neck speed to start a war that if you had any sense should be stretched out to prolong as much as propel the fucking story. We don’t even know what this fuckwit’s actual SKILLSET is. You didn’t even let him win against the SPIRIT. Just… fuck me. Put the cart before the horse all the way through, and then wonder why your game’s not doing as well in financial support as you want it to.

Six: Right before you sign post a “terrible event” you also YEET the MAIN GIRL in the ONLYTWO GIRL BIO SECTION THAT HAS BEEN UNLOCKED (And the only one that even got a little foreplay, never mind a fucking sex scene…) into a mission that she SHOULD NOT BE TAKING ON THIS SOON. It’s a HAREM. You need to focus on giving the PLAYER the AVENUE to BUILD THE FUCKING RELATIONSHIPS! There was even a point where you as a DICK wrote as a possible response “Is This Goodbye?” [I know why you did, and I will call you EVERY shade of a dipshit for doing so. Ad infinitum because it says you KNOW what the fuck you did with that option. Dumbass] * At this point you may as well say I’m actually yanking your chain to make you think that I will write her out of the damned game. Or I am actually stupid enough to GENUINELY write her out of the damned game! (Pull this with Hannah to Theo and there’s less problem; as long as Theo is the one who dies and MC gets to console Hannah unexpectedly on her end, afterward) We have literally NO reason to trust that you aren’t going to kill her off. Your premise, and revelations thus far HAVE NOT EARNED THAT. They’ve actually COUNTERED that very notion. To the point it’s much more plausible you’re GOING to kill her off. Just to fuck with the staples of the genre, if not with your own audience’s heads.

** I swear to unholy fuck dude: if you make the full list of characters in the bio section be the morons we’re meant to teach OTHER than Riley and Liz, first… I fucking knew it. Second, you’re an ass of the highest order for introducing so many other females to start, and third: I WILL drop the damned game. In an instant. You already fucked MC over by giving him a TEACHING position… as a “GUARDIAN!” (It contradicts ALL of your bullshit built up LORE, that you spent way too long listing out as the elite of the elite WARRIORS!!!) Just because you want to ham-fist in some WAY TOO WORN OUT anime troupe bullshit. Come on. If you want to reference Norse Myth and cross it with Christian to do a war between Heaven & Hell go for it. Rock out with your cock out, and I’ll bite the head off bat girl all day long (She’d do it to me, and you know it…) If you want to create a slice of life, run of the mill, school-based teen harem… why the fuck would you bother with all this grim dark, religious toned pretentious build up. Hell the two brothers may as well be: bitchboy gets Caned, and I’m the one who’s actually Abel. : /

There were 3 POINTLESS prologue chapters you could’ve expounded on in fifteen minutes, that I guarantee you no one gives a flying fuck about. The art is NOT compelling enough to be that level of attractive (subjective I’ll grant but I much prefer realistic rendering even if semi cartoonish – IE Cozy Cafe or My New Family style – to the truly Cartoon style in the better chunk of most Anime styled games of this sort) to allow you to bore your audience that way. You’ve barely explained anything about the demons, and the only actions taken so far have me thinking there’s no chance in literal hell we should ever trust one of them. Which is what you get for going too far out of your way to mindfuck the audience. (Showing that there may in fact be ONE good girl demon does not mean the MC should trust her – when his faction and race are in complete opposition to her people. If you’re thinking to set her up as Juliet, don’t. I’ve read the play and everyone knows how that ends. That’s NOT harem)

If there’s going to be ANY future for this game – you need to A) unlock the bios so we can fucking SEE who the hell is actually GOING to be pursued. B) FIX the issue that so many females are either in positions where they can’t pursue a relationship with MC, or are actively taken. And IF you’re going to promise Pregnancy then GET ON THAT! Some time BEFORE the midpoint of the damned game. I’m getting really tired of all of the games that have the tag and I get blue balled into eternity waiting for that. Damn it. (Also, also: because I don’t trust you any farther than I can throw you and I don’t know that I could lift you… NOBODY BUT THE MC SHOULD GET A GIRL PREGNANT!!!) * You’ve mucked things about even in the prologues and the first chapter, so much that I feel my absolute distrust is warranted.

another dumb cunt dev who thinks forced sex scenes is a good idea another fuck tard dev who thinks giving certain choices and not allowing me too pick them is a good idea so good job being just like the 90% of the fuck tard devs this trash is worth nothing