Baskin All-In the Family

First, you NEED to lay off the grim dark bullshit. Harem ISN’T the genre for that.

Second; the Bill Reilly reference was not even remotely implemented well (it’s tonally jarring to the point it takes you OUT of the story – IF you know what the hell it’s actually from)

Third = Every. Single. Fucking. Girl is either Family; a “best friend” he can still LEAVE for X bullshit amount of years, or some rando (who’s the only actually completely attractively rendered female in the game – and Buddy: GREY is not “raven haired” If Cindy was actually raven haired she MIGHT be more attractive, the way you have her rendered I thought she was another female that was basically an idealized 40 year old – she should be the YOUNGEST looking girl in the game! Especially as “redneck” as you seem to want to get with it – because “Asians don’t age”)

Gail, does NOT need to exist. Period. Tsundere is NOT an endearing concept and NEEDS to die; for me that’s EXACTLY why she’s his “ex.” End of. [You might also make it KNOWN that talking to Hermoine first SKIPS the option to talk to her – which NEGATES the point of a harem game] She is for that arctype alone, the exact kind of girl you NEVER deal with. She will not get what she actually wants, if it was real life; because she will NEVER TELL YOU OUTRIGHT what she actually wants – and expects her love interest to be either a punching bag, or fucking psychic. Tsundere as a concept in general, needs to DIE in EVERY level of Hellfire.

The Mom looks like she got beat with the ugly stick more than once. The father didn’t need to be an asshole to the point MC got “driven out of town” to get away from him, and if the way you’ve written the girls is supposed to make MC want to stick around – it’s not likely to even make your audience want to keep PLAYING. Jesus. Harem is not “Let me present you with 60 shades of 10 girls who are OBJECTIVELY. BROKEN!!!” Just because I want an excuse to be a passive aggressive little asshole to you, Player.

The character have to START Endearing, and CONTINUE to be more so. That’s how you ENGAGE your audience. They have to be WORTH choosing, from the fucking start. They’re not TROUPES. Even the Rando cute redhead wants to get away from her Mom, who we’re not introduced to, in order to know WHY? We barely get her number at all and no one knows if it’s even the right one, so what the fuck did you bother putting her in the game for? You spent SEVERAL scenes making it look like she was trying to get MC’s attention… (If it was because I made the wrong choice – your “not a walkthrough” doesn’t make it obvious enough what the fuck the RIGHT one to get with her definitively IS! Which is also the whole fucking POINT of a goddamned Walkthrough; of ANY type)

> Reiner as your best friend SHOULDN’T have tried to get with ANY of MC sisters. The sisters DON’T need to have had ANY sexual experience aside from MC (maybe…) in the past. The audience generally isn’t going to want to care about who ELSE they have fucked, or are fucking, if it’s NOT the MAIN CHARACTER! The POINT of Harem as a genre is that NOBODY ELSE BUT MC GETS TO FUCK THEM!!! We should get to flesh out in the playthrough as we choose, what previous relationships might be (Tulip was YOU being an arse about hinting that – and straight up denies the player the right to choose WHICH girl he gave his virginity to…) and apparently none of them somehow are “blood” family anyway. So “Mom” being in the game is even more pointless cause the only way that works is if Father was sterile, or she’s barren if they’re not BOTH useless for reproductive purposes. With “Pregnancy” in the tags >.<

The “Baby” of the family doesn’t HAVE to mean “Brat” and even if you’re doing the “Princess” version of it, for BDSM teasing; Bryerly can fuck right off. She’s actually not terribly rendered (but I am tired of Incest content…) and her with the obvious penis envy concept is a HARD sell to want to bring into the harem at any rate. Tulip wanted MC back so badly she turned his fucking bedroom into her OFFICE! Pick a tone, Dumbass. The other one likes to be sassy for literally no good reason, and comes off like a BRO. Not a love interest. Just based on how you made the town so far, MC’s going to have to do SO much work just to get into ONE set of pants… and it’s NOT worth the effort. He has no sustainable job; he’s NOT going to be rich in the vein of acting you’ve put him into… he has NOTHING going for him that would make him a viable Harem Leader. So other than edgelord dickery, I have no clue how the fuck you’re going to realistically state that he’ll do anything long term to IMPROVE anything in that town, or any of the girls’ lives.

There are massive problems with the story conceptually. The tone, and ALL of the characters in general. But if any of you won’t give a toss and have a fucked up sense of humor, maybe this is your bag. If so, have at it.