Almost Dead

First, the story is decent. Glad you finally got away from over-killing the title without actually killing the MC. Kinda surprised you didn’t go with CrazyTown for the main theme song; or put butterfly tattoos on all of the girls somewhere. Then again, I probably shouldn’t give anyone smartie pants ideas. I’m more an M&M’s guy myself. Second, it’s a HAREM. The girls are far too focused on fucking each other for the sake of inclusivity. I don’t mind a diverse cast and you can have a couple be openly Bi, but Charlie??? You’re the ones that made her background from a culture that will LITERALLY kill her for that kind of thing. She can flirt, tease and so on… she can do the nudist thing but the last thing she should be okay with is doing anyone other than the MC. (Especially with the drama you guys put into getting her INTO the harem. I was mixed on her at first, but now I’d like to see more and even though she claims she wants MC’s baby; EVERY scene she’s in after that point has been cut off. No bueno.

First: Your job in the telling of the story is to actually create the FULL sex scenes. There’s no point in trying to hook the section of the audience that enjoys pregnancy content if you’re not willing to show the point where the conception happens. (I’m not asking for an internal view – though I do like that about another game) It breaks suspension of disbelief that the kid would be MC’s if they’re half the time busy fucking each other as much as him AND we only get to see half the scene whenever it does involve him. You have the doctor nurse pair for the lesbian includes that end up more BI to be added to the harem – which I do not mind, but I would also argue did not need to be included. You’ve married off (Though I’m expecting that like Apple something WILL happen – and it would be nice if MC does NOT get blamed for it) the one health center nurse who was actually willing in the first place [Ichika might have been, but she was admittedly already tied to Julie then]

Point being; you have enough females added to the game, and they all need to be more focused on JUST the MC. On getting pregnant, and on progressing their individual relationships. I would call Alice and Peipei the last and be done with it, or you will very likely start to lose track harder than you already may have. The twins are fine for continued threeways, but really no one else needed to be that willing to go there. It dilutes the harem aspect in general. A harem is NOT an orgy. A harem is NOT a swingers party. Having him pay for the wedding straight up is just calling him a doormat – or a red flag that YES he’s definitely going to do something. He can be a nice guy; that’s fine and to be expected from a true dominant. Don’t make him an idiot. I’d also say it was unnecesary for potential drama to have Lucy tied as half sister to Julie, when Julie was the one seemingly more hesitant about MC in the first place. And you pull that out of the air RIGHT when Ichika thinks she might be willing to join the harem in full. Really?

I also find it a little weird that the female judge/Jessica are on the main menu list of girls. I’m not advocating for more of the judge. I personally think the GILF thing is a bit more of a joke, or actively passive aggressive of developers about what tastes you think your audience has. She had one scene with any real influence, and Jessica as of the end of Chapter 11 is written out of game. So is the main menu going to change to reflect the girls that actually ARE kept harem members? It not, fair enough. It’s mostly polish work. However it would probably be appreciated by the fans. So far, there’ve been a few harder points to the story I didn’t like, but the relationships are investable for the most part. Again, they should be as a straight up harem game for ninety percent of it’s run, more focus on activity with the MC strictly but the efforts to actually endear in building genuine relationships with the girls are appreciated. Looking forward to seeing where you’ll go. I think all the girls should agree that Tina is the legal wife, and all the rest will do a Celtic binding – not that kind, jeez ; ) – ceremony. To signify they are “wives of the heart.” (Gets around the whole one wife, and only one wife allowed bit, without having to add in some fantasy land or island where you can just marry all of them. Though that would explain that beach scene in the main menu, come to think of it)

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