Unexpected Consequences

Played this all the way through from beginning to current update yesterday.
A few key points:

First, Harem. It’s in the tags: It’s NOT a “Polyamorous” relationship. (Personally Polyamorous Relationship is an oxymoron…) At all. Nor does it usually involve actual Lesbians (I do take exception if you’re going to make MC breed both Andi and Holly and then have it be an ONS – that’s NOT what harem is) If you’re going to do Andi joins as “married” to Holly (In Spirit – because her decision to be with MC should either change but not end the relationship, or Holly will decide that she’s actually Bi as well, and does want MC for herself. Even if it doesn’t stop how deeply she loves Andi. This, would be acceptable within the bounds of the formula for a HAREM) OR breaks off with Holly only to find that Holly jumps in herself [Potentially to try to win Andi back, competitively, but also ends up massively falling in love with MC by accident] then that’s something. Otherwise you’re literally trying to fit a square peg into a round hole as a genre. I’m not saying don’t include them. But they’re either wingman characters as best friends to MC/His Girls, or they don’t need to be shown in game at all.

TL;DR = Lesbian does not work in a Male Lead Harem. It works for Yuri. End of.

A HAREM is: Many women will sign on with ONE guy; EXCLUSIVELY. Rachael in that regard WOULD absolutely count as NTR content the way you have her – IF you ever actually intend her to be a player pursuable female. [If not, you’re still being a dick making us watch Gorilla boy fuck the Size Queen as a Recommended Path = which alludes to it may be an option in future updates. It SHOULD NOT be. Or you need to re-write that entire fucking thing to have them be FRIENDS and that’s all. Tony can go fuck whoever the hell he wants… OFF screen. That. Is a harem. The way you have done things is not.

Jamie was bad enough with the am I going to have to watch the best friend character you were sign posting way too hard SHOULD belong to the MC, and making her treat him like an ass even when she was just as culpable for why they didn’t get together. Beyond that, you REALLY need to STOP MAKING HIM APOLOGIZE FOR EVERYTHING! Especially stop with the girls defending it wasn’t his fault if you’re going to make him apologize for his literal existence. Come on.

Claiming and breeding her was great; but while we’re on it… not every character needs to be instantly connected. Too many cousins of my friend’s sister’s best friend bullshit coincidences. There’s also the fact that given how long he can go; and how many he’s BRED so damned instantly = there’s NO WAY THE MC ISN’T ENHANCED. Kat is NOT wrong. You can retcon in so many bullshit connections; you can figure out a way the super detective is NOT wrong. INCLUDING maybe the traits are slightly different in MEN, or for example like the crap you pulled with the Vi Op… a MORE Enhanced version of the alterations has different tell traits. It’s not that hard.

Beyond that, why is Becca even in the game if you’re going to insist she doesn’t want a relationship? For that matter – Jaime doesn’t need to let Kat fuck her in the ass with a strap on. A) We barely got to take her vaginal virginity [There was no blood shown; and I know… But it’s a TROUPE in the genre. A visible sign of her purity does help assurances that she was in fact a virgin – and no; by the way, if she had a toy penetrate far enough into her… she’s NOT a fucking virgin Dev] B) She was already on thin ice for the will they won’t they bullshit. That’s NOT how you should introduce 3 way content; and again it breaks the conventions that make the damned genre what it is. The women SHOULD be focused SPECIFICALLY AND EXCLUSIVELY on the MC. It’s HIS trust and love they need to be constantly willing to prove they WANT. Why? Because most Harem Leads are DOMINANT at heart, are collectors – will only collect what is actually valueable, fucking anyone ever just because they’re part of a secret group IS NOT LOYAL – and genuinely will be the sort that wants their females happy over all. So if he thinks it’s not HIM making them happy = They are free to WALK. As in NOT RETURN. Ever. At all.

If you’re going to randomly include incest content you build up to the IDEA that maybe Kat wants to fuck Jaime, and was always interested [This also had the problem of turning the “good little Christian Girl” into a Super Freak instantly – it doesn’t happen that way; and yeah I happen to be a Good Man. So I know what’s buried and how much you hold back. I’m NOT saying she can’t be a freak between the sheets in her own right – I am saying it’s jarring done like that, and quite that fast] then you BUILD up to the notion that maybe Jaime wants to be more adventurous, or is moreso at heart than she would have thought. You ASK the PLAYER for INPUT about whether they want to see Girl/Girl Content, because Jaime letting Kat fuck her with the strap on CAN AND DOES count as NTR in the genre you profess the game to be.

There were also several times you just stopped doing the binary choice to come inside, and EACH OF THEM SHOULD BE. That way we get the clear warning of when the girl will get pregnant (There’s all but no chance it didn’t happen to Vi if she got a stronger version and Andi got a bun in her oven. Unless of course you’re retarded enough to make Vi sterile. DO NOT That will be another flag to some Harem players, and it’s a particular pet peeve for me) Other than that, and as mentioned way too much plot convenience in character relations/Constantly UNDERPOWERING or UNDERMINING the MC… it’s a decent harem game that’s got potential. I wouldn’t have spent several more hours than I thought there was content for if I didn’t think it was a good start. I think you made Siobhann a little too obvious. But with that collar, you NEED to write her as a pure submissive to MC. Especially with how aggressively she showed interest, and how randomly she was introduced as a known quantity on the side lines of MC’s past.

Graphics are good but the story and dialogue is awful