The Harem Garage

Also – Gabi is a virgin; that DOESN’T mean she gets to be on top (decide whether you want this asshole to be DOMINANT = He’s going to be the one that wants control > or he’s every girl’s whimpering bitch)

Sue SHOULD BE A VIRGIN… and of course she’s fucking not. FUCK BEING ON THE PILL. She didn’t say so from the start > she said she’s OKAY with marriage and kids even if it wouldn’t be conventional > SHE SHOULD NOT CARE IF YOU CUM INSIDE YOU BLOODY TWIT! (This is an MASSIVE issue if you ever DO decide to aknowledge pregnancy content as a STAPLE of Harem ENDGAME)

You all but imply that Arianna is a dyke – then walk it back to say she’s JUST an overprotective friend. You’re trying too hard to make Stefan a “credible” antagonist and then WAFFLING on it when he actually has a reason to BE that level of dick. Come on. {Being that level of dick would ALSO be the easy out to get Victoria on MC’s side… Just saying}

Taylor breaking Tommy? Why. First off, he’s small framed but he’s BUILT (a GIRL isn’t going to be ABLE to hit as hard as a guy. There have been professional female boxers that PROVE this unequivocally, against any guy even remotely of similar build – who practice even a different martial art entirely * You can look this up on Youtube relatively easily; it’s not a political statement, it’s raw unequivocal science. So fuck off with the “Goddess” bullshit mate) If she really wants a go at him for whatever reason, I say go for it, but do it realistic. Let him break her nose, and put her on her arse then call it an ‘accident,’ if she’s a big mouth sort to teach her a fucking lesson. Have the player come to her defense and stop Tommy going too far for the automatic IN. He’s not supposed to get laid anyway (and I swear to god if you DARE to show him getting anywhere with a woman in game I will never download this shit game again) I’m getting REAL tired of the 90-110 lb soaking wet girl that thinks she’s goddamned Clark Kent. It’s not “bad ass.” It’s not “tough chick.” It’s asking to be sent away in an ambulance. The point is to make them ENDEARING. For more than their bloody appearance (for the record; you don’t dress like that and then have Sue be pissed when they all look. It’s NOT PERVERTED TO LOOK. Or to flirt with someone who seems that open and dresses a specific way. Jesus. Look the goddamed word up.

Actually, here: I’ll do it for you…
= Perverted: (of a person or their actions) characterized by sexually abnormal and unacceptable practices or tendencies. Can you see what the fucking KEY WORDS are? ABNORMAL. UNACCEPTABLE Practices. IE anything that is deemed socially unacceptable to a degree that it would see you put in JAIL. Not unacceptable because she doesn’t fucking like it! [Especially because she actually DOES like it; if she invites such attention by the way she fucking dresses] There are no words for how much it pisses me right off that so many of you dipshits overuse this word. That so many girls MISUSE this word as a JUDGMENT > Then wonder why no one will approach them anymore. Gee, I wonder? Here’s the thing; in that scene specifically, she is dressed like a slut, asks the MC to be rather progressively minded, and actively contradicts herself by behavior in the next scene because you wore the words “I’m on the pill.” (You kill the fantasy and all of the power in it when you do things like this… That’s what irks me) She asks NOT to be judged though she knows by her state of dress and manner she absolutely will, and then throws out exactly the god damned same. And The Hippo Crits. Nat 20. There’s NO good reason to write that word with a woman you WANT your majority MALE audience to find endearing. Ever. At all. Even if it’s teasing.

So far, between this post and the last – you have A LOT to fix. There’s some potential; but most aren’t going to be here for the street racing premise. They WILL be here for the tits, and the pussy, and the MALE POWER fantasy (Which also includes eventual IMPREGNANTION! At the PLAYER’S discretion) You can accept that and work towards building endearing, long term relationships that SUPPORT the background in context and actually help the MC achieve his goals in the long term while forging new ones as an “unconventional” family (hence me being massively pissed at the OBVIOUS work around for Sue “being on the pill”) or you can bore the ever living shit out of 99% of your general audience with innane, very technical dialogue that most of them will SKIP.