Blade of LustBlade of Lust

Okay, first I’ll IGNORE the insanely UNNECESSARY “Futa” crap as the only thing I’ll say about it.

> You have a system that’s NOT well explained – just to start: The Guard House for your first quest can take the whole damned DAY to get to, so it’s NIGHT TIME by the time you get sent to the NEXT quest… WRONG!

> Time of Day DOES NOT NEED TO PASS THAT QUICKLY!!! It shouldn’t bloody pass at all until I CHOOSE TO ENGAGE IN AN ACTIVITY! And even then there should be more than four fucking slots to a day if you’re GOING to involve more than 4 women in game – NOT counting the one who factually never needed to be, and ISN’T ONE IF SHE DOESN’T HAVE A PUSSY! * Sue me, it’s not the only thing…

> Guard Captain ACTIVELY DOES THREATEN THE MAIN CHARACTER = WHO WAS JUST “Rescued” and is then regardless of actual HEALED state, TREATED LIKE HER/The Town’s BITCH!!! (It WAS a threat – you literally wrote she had to “SOFTEN” HER FUCKING TONE, DIPSHIT) AND SHE IS IN A POSITION OF AUTHORITY!!! You CANNOT write a credible LOVE INTEREST in this manner. Most people would tell her to PISS ABSOLUTELY RIGHT OFF > or be too damned AFRAID to think to TRY to seduce her; write like your fucking characters are PART OF THE ACTUAL WORLD YOU WANT TO CREATE!!! You’re writing her like you think she is GOING to be a love interest: Regardless… and she’s NOT going to be when you start this heavy-handed for LITERALLY NO FUCKING REASON. What threat is a half dead brain dead motherfucker who has a “sealed” weapon and BARELY survived against fucking BANDITS??? What threat does she possibly see – and if you DON’T take the Futa option (which is retarded pandering, and doesn’t need to be in the game at all) then there’s literally NO ACTUAL SHOWN OR STATED DIFFERENCE THAT MAKES ANY SENSE, Between this dipshit and a SIGNPOST! He doesn’t have especially unique physique in design (the horse cock is REQUISITE, NOT UNIQUE) Or any particularly noteable characteristic at this point which would MARK HIM A THREAT!!!

> Weapon Sealed? (does it matter if it’s not even fucking EQUIPPED???) Why. There’s no bandit EVER who would LET the MC keep their fucking weapon IF they were bound up and waiting to fucking die. >.< Weapon LOST (Which could be a side quest to gain power = go find a STRONG item later in game to POWER UP, would be the better way to handle that)

> Pregnancy. It’s not tagged, it’s not even remotely a thing – but it might be nice to know if it’s possibly GOING to be at some point. [It’d be one way to get the guard captain to calm her tits…]

> Frankly I also want to say fuck the WSAD bullshit – you want me to go somewhere in story: YOU MOVE THE DAMNED CHARACTER SO IT DOESN’T TAKE FOREVER TO GET THERE! Just don’t do the fighting for me, and I’m good. Don’t make it take forever to gain one level, and I’m good. Make each level up give me stats in the vein of MORE than ONE at a level, and I am good. Don’t make an economy where a new weapon (which SHOULDN’T be a sword and SHOULD be MY choice!!!) costs more than I can earn in an HOUR of playtime, and I am good – design character builds and actual skill stuff/magic that will help the player get stronger/feel like they can survive the monsters, and you’d have a better RPGMaker game than 90% of the ones out there. But the Futa shit is an unforced error as a strike AGAINST your game. It adds FUCK AND ALL to it.